I've seen worse, yet I also see a lot to improve there. Watch your grammatics a little bit, try not to use internetslang, try to use "" when someone is saying something, throw in a little more detail, things like that.
It may not sound all to impressive at the moment, but I'm sure that you can bring forth some lovely stories with the right help and the right coaching. Try looking for a veteran roleplayer to coach you a little bit. I'm not brilliant either, but I may be able to teach you a thing or 2. If you're interested, let me know.
Therefor, for now, I'll give you:
Genin Level